PLAYING GOD Chapter 10

Zaphod · Post by **Zaphod** » Tue Nov 18, 2008 5:26 pm

X-O HoboJoe wrote:
Zaphod wrote:I kinda feel *SQUEE* saying anything negative but will just leave it at, not the strongest of the chapters IMO. In dialogue or art.

I still strongly support the job you guys are doing, but there were some points that I didn't much like (is all, heh)
Seriously, I'd like to hear why so improvements can be made and a good critique is far less easy to come by than one would suspect.

If you don't want to publically, could you PM?

well...they are nitpicky anal things that aren't entirely constructive...not that I could think they would be anyways so really...just griping from someone who isn't stepping up to the plate.

If I had constructive criticism or suggestions it might be helpful but as I think on it...I don't know that I do, when it comes to the art. I couldn't manage stick figures let alone utilize forced perspective or what-have-you.

Storywise, I think it might be helpful to use peoples names more often.

Any more plot gripes, I really need to wait until there is a finished product before I can rip anyone a new MOTAhole.

heh, anyone think the term might catch on. And I mean it as a tribute, truly.

hulk181man · Post by **hulk181man** » Tue Nov 18, 2008 6:40 pm

Wow! The opening art panel in this segment was sweet

I feel you guys are hitting stride the longer this goes on --- thank you for doing this. It's nice to be able to read new stories again

1A · Post by 1A » Wed Nov 19, 2008 12:01 pm

wow.

just came across these today! Really awesome and fun to read. Great stuff and I can't wait to see where it all goes.

X-O HoboJoe · Post by **X-O HoboJoe** » Wed Nov 19, 2008 12:03 pm

1A wrote:wow. just came across these today! Really awesome and fun to read. Great stuff and I can't wait to see where it all goes.

Glad to see you here!

dave · Post by **dave** » Thu Nov 20, 2008 1:31 pm

i think that it is telling that this latest chapter had some of the most input since the beginning.