PLAYING GOD Chapter 10

Playing God - a Valiant story written, drawn, edited, and published online for ValiantFans.com in 2008-2009.

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X-O HoboJoe wrote:
Zaphod wrote:I kinda feel *SQUEE* saying anything negative but will just leave it at, not the strongest of the chapters IMO. In dialogue or art.

I still strongly support the job you guys are doing, but there were some points that I didn't much like (is all, heh)
Seriously, I'd like to hear why so improvements can be made and a good critique is far less easy to come by than one would suspect.

If you don't want to publically, could you PM? :hope:
well...they are nitpicky anal things that aren't entirely constructive...not that I could think they would be anyways so really...just griping from someone who isn't stepping up to the plate.

If I had constructive criticism or suggestions it might be helpful but as I think on it...I don't know that I do, when it comes to the art. I couldn't manage stick figures let alone utilize forced perspective or what-have-you.

Storywise, I think it might be helpful to use peoples names more often.

Any more plot gripes, I really need to wait until there is a finished product before I can rip anyone a new MOTAhole.

heh, anyone think the term might catch on. And I mean it as a tribute, truly.
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Post by hulk181man »

Wow! The opening art panel in this segment was sweet :clap:

I feel you guys are hitting stride the longer this goes on --- thank you for doing this. It's nice to be able to read new stories again :thumb:

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wow. :o just came across these today! Really awesome and fun to read. Great stuff and I can't wait to see where it all goes.

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1A wrote:wow. :o just came across these today! Really awesome and fun to read. Great stuff and I can't wait to see where it all goes.
Glad to see you here! :thumb:
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i think that it is telling that this latest chapter had some of the most input since the beginning.


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